Week 7 Blog Reviews

Jade:::

Just Being a Male Can Be Deceitful

I love that you took such a personal approach to this freewrite. Your choice or words and writing style was much less “academic” so to say, and it gave it excitement, a sense of friendliness, and made it relatable. I like that you first made a somewhat personal statement about having an argument with a guy that could have been avoided had you know about Tannen’s theories.. and then summarized her ideas. I really enjoyed reading this, good job!

Till “Divorce” Do Us Part..

Your introductory paragraph was really catchy (in a good way), and definitely grabbed my attention. Your citations, like last week, compliment your writing and support what you are saying. I like that you narrowed in on just a few of Wright’s ideas. There was so much information! But narrowing seemed to help keep your paper interesting and at a good length. However, overall, your thesis was bit confusing to me. You clearly said you were in support of marriage but when I read it along with the rest of your paper, until I got to your conclusion (which made strong points), I thought maybe you were headed in the “I believe in marriage, BUT..” approach rather than a more direct argumentative approach. Besides that, I enjoyed your writing. It was easy to read, and had good flow.


Aubrie:::

Lost in Translation

Your writing for this freewrite took a different approach then I was expecting. By starting it off with your story, you kept me much more entertained (and curious!) then the usual prompts we write about. I like your choice of citations, and think you did a great job summing up the story by summarizing her thoughts and concluding that it frustrations probably stemmed from your different conversation styles. Good job.

Is Monogamy the Key?

Love this. Your writing, word choice, flow was there for me. It held my was very informative and held my interest. Good choice on summarizing Wright’s ideas and concepts. Was a re-fresher for me! Really enjoyed your conclusion: “It has often been said that some of life’s most rewarding pursuits are those that are difficult, that one must work and strive for. Therefore, the state of marriage should not be done away simply because it is difficult for this very reason. Monogamous marriage should continue for the benefit of society, in the view of Wright.” Overall, I don’t have much to complain about except that perhaps the first sentence in that conclusion could have maybe been reworded after the comma. Such a trivial thing though. Good job.


Monique:::

He said/She said (WILL YOU LISTEN)!!

I enjoyed reading this writing of yours. I like that you summarized Tannen’s ideas rather than taking direct quotes from her writing. They way you did it helped your paper flow as I thought it all held the same tone. Good conclusion too. I like that you chose to end this paper with a sort of analysis on the way your spouse acted and the way you reacted. And.. umm.. I have to COMPLETELY agree with you about making all the decisions. Isn’t it the worst?

*Saving Monogamous Marriages*

I like your title. It was direct and was the perfect statement for me to foretell the direction your paper was going to be taking. Your writing had its fair share of citations and ideas from the reading, but I like that you actually indulged into some of your personal ideas for support of your paper as well. It made reading it much more interesting, and less like reading a biased summary. Overall, I enjoyed this piece and I agree that people need to work at their relationship and not rush into marriage. After all, when we marry, aren’t we anticipating spending the rest of our lives with our partner anyways?! No rush. =]