Week 8 Blog Reviews

Jade:::

After all, Maybe It’s… Biology

This was so easy to read. For some odd reason my textbook was missing the pages that pertained to that writing assignment so I couldn’t do it…. And thus I especially like how you translated both your opinions and the authors and wrote in a comprehendible way. Love is soooo interesting, and I agree with you that more people need to realize it’s a biological concept too. I had no idea that about the pupil dilation! There were a few grammatical errors and sentences I think you probably could have revised – “As a society we have a way of thinking that our Prince Charming just comes along one day, we date, get married, and have kids in that white picket fence surrounding our cute little house.” It sounded a bit like a run on sentence, and I think maybe you meant something along the lines of “…and have kids in our cute little house surrounded by that white picket fence.”... Just errors you’ll catch by editing! Good job though, it was an easy and fun piece of writing to read.

To Be Or Not To Be

This assignment was well organized and again easy to read. I particularly like the in addition to your opinions and support from the book that you brought in another reference (the Bible) for support. Of course, as it always has, religion plays a big factor on the entire concept of homosexuality and it was smart of you to bring it up. Good job.


Aubrie:::

The Science of Dating

Good structure in your writing. I feel like I could have just read your paper in substitute of the actual article (though I didn’t get to do the assignment so maybe there was quite a bit more I missed??) because you’ve summarized the author’s ideas and concepts so well. I think that the amount of personality you allow to show through in your writing is really a good thing and you should keep doing it the way you are. To me, sometimes too much personality can make writing come off as amateurish. You use it minimally and in a way that makes the writing soo pleasant. It’s the little statements like these that I enjoy: “To me, it’s a bit like a magic trick being explained to you.” and “…(not unless you were a fan of Ariel and wanted an Eric of your own).”I very much enjoyed your writing this week.

Jungle to Jacksonville?

Catchy title. I dig it. This assignment was written nicely. I like that you brought in other animal-human similarities rather than merely focusing on the concepts discussed in the reading. An animal to human dictionary would be a tremendous help in choosing which side of the endless debate is right. I certainly support you on that idea.. Overall good writing again. Enjoyed it.


Monique:::

What’s Chemistry got to do with Love!!

You picked such a great quote to use as your opening statement. It was catchy and intriguing. You did such a thorough job writing this paper and made organized all of it very well. One thing that really popped out to me was the you wrote much of the paper in your own words, but also had very supportive citations. I like your technique in dealing with references because it blends both your opinion and the research or support nicely. It gets boring when all you do it read quotes from a textbook, and unjustified when you have nothing to support it! Overall, great writing. I think you’re a great writer. I really enjoyed it.

Is Homosexuality Natural??

From the ideas of the paper, to the support for it, to your opinion, you had great flow and organization. You kept each part separate and discussed each equally. I agree that it’s a never ending debate. The evidence of animal homosexuality will work in favor of homosexuality only if you’re for it in the first place. Good use of citations. They were strong and summarized many of the ideas discussed nicely. Overall, good writing!!!